Talk:Five Nights at Karl's/@comment-27010092-20161024230829

Review
This was awesome! I enjoy the characters, their descriptions, and the storyline! I also feel like the phone guy saying, "Uh," or studdering on words means something. Custom Nights have good names for the most part(not bad ones such as "Karl and Brennan's Night.)" You added the proper categories, and used good grammar for the most part!

However, as with anything, there are some flaws.
 * Not everything is 100% descriptive. What does Brennan resemble? Someone like blank?


 * Be more aware of the timeline. I don't think animatronics could tell the difference between songs and music in 1959.


 * Not a huge flaw, but there are some grammar ares in some places. However, I can't judge too much, because I make mistakes similar that while typing for long periods as well.


 * The text in the phone calls should be in paragraphs. The Night 1 phone call was a little hard to read, since it wasn't as separated. I lost where I was on a few lines.

However, be glad these were the flaws. Why, you may ask? Well, because they can easily be fixed. You easily could "space out" the phone calls, improve a few errors with grammar, and be a little more descriptive by just adding a sentence or two.

Overall, this was awesome! Expect some future fan-art! ;)

8.7/10