User blog comment:KamiOfWind/Rough Draft/@comment-26914191-20150602001848/@comment-26426764-20150602002240

It's good so far, really. Just needs some more explaining at some parts, and perhaps some filler text to make it longer. You said you wanted it to be like Godzilla NES, right? I, for one, love that pasta, so maybe reread it and pick up on some things the author did. Perhaps every hour, a new area of the pizzeria opens up, and every time you get to 6am you have to escape from a Demon making the children evil or something. At the end of night 7, you set the kids' spirits free. FOR REAL.

Also, it's not as bad as some crappypastas out there, so there's that.